Life, My Personal Essay
Kristine
When I was around 12, my youngest cousin as far as I know was born. Soren was born on June 17, 2003. In the early morning 3 days after mine and I hoped with every thing that it would have been the same day. Out of all 30-40 odd cousins I have Soren is special, well him and his eldest brother Matthew or Matt who was at the time around 10 only two years younger to me and the closest to my age, he’s the only one I can really talk about stuff to everyone else is at least 15-18 or 8 and under. Matt and Soren have hearts more pure then gold, minds sharp as and clear like smoothly cut quarts. I’ve known Matt since he was 2/3 years old and Soren since he was just a few hours or so old.



The morning Soren was born my Nona (grandma), Vince and I wanted to go see him and so we did. Though it surprised me how short the walk across town was though the whole way down there I was jumping and rushing. My aunty was half asleep and smiling when she was us that is Vince and me hesitate at the door, my Nona didn’t just walked in and kind-a kidnap Soren from uncle for a minute and gave him back and talked mom stuff with aunty well we wondered to uncle Neils and baby Soren. He didn’t even have his first bath yet and we got to hold him. It’s one of the best feelings a person can feel, it’s like flying higher and higher into the sky to watch the sun rise over a great body of water. I felt like I could hold him and float in the clouds forever yet I could end him, blow outs is new flame with just the slightest squeeze. It’s true what they say about babies; when a baby opens their eyes and smiles with a glowing face, your life seems to be as a pebble compared to the mountains worth of theirs. The moment that he smiled at me I felt a deep burning desire to protect him from anything that might bring harm to him and at the same time I wanted to be there for him and watch him learn everything a kid learns.



Matt I’m pretty sure was the same he was always there watching and teaching Soren “the ropes” to say. Matt’s always getting him out of trouble just as or before he gets in it and always helps him. Even though it gets rough for him and he gets in trouble in place of Soren I don’t think he would change much of how things happened/turned out Especially how he and their brother taught Soren to walk and run at ten months old, he could even mumble words. But the best ever for me was when he did what I thought was impossible for his age. Only 10 months of age Soren was able to say my name correctly, even though it was only once and I was the only one who heard he still said it and I will never forget it. Since he was the first to say it right before turning 7-8 years old, he had made my year saying it and it completely made up for forgetting me when I hadn’t seen him for almost if not a year. And then he could talk ok and still say my name right but every one hears it now that he’s 11/2 years old.

Unless when Matt was telling to say my name incorrectly on purpose forcing me to tell Soren to say mats name wrong or something of sort, usually ending only when we get in trouble for “confusing” Soren. He loved playing that game just as much as us you could see it on his face.



This last summer when I went to visit family in Cranbrook Soren was almost to my shoulders and 5 years old, starting school that year and very excited too. Matt was 15 and cursedly an inch and so taller then me. Soren is able to say my name as well as write it out, first and last. Matt doesn’t dare make him say my last name wrong and smart to realize it to. Being able to watch some one close to you grow is truly amazing to see so many of their firsts like riding a bike, being potty trained, first spooky movie or first day of school I’ve seen a lot of Sorens is a wonderful feeling to have and I wish every one gets to fell it even if you end up feeling very old after the warm and fuzzy feelings gone, its just part of life and living.



By: Kristine A.S. Rose

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Mariam
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Work on your punctuation It's really hard to understand what you mean when you don't have the correct punctuation don't you agree
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I liked the essay but I would have to agree with the first post form Mariam. It was hard to understand everything I was reading because some of the sentences just went on and on. Try to do the grammar checker on word and submitting it hear is a good thing before turning it in. Also the timing is a tad bit off.
August,25 2009

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Write4life25
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I like your use of similies, you paint a good picture, some of the punctuation is off, which makes it hard to understand, but overall it was pretty good.
August,23 2009

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Pretty good essay, grammar interfered a bit with what you were trying to say, but in it's entirety, pretty good.
September,12 2009

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Snowangel 15
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Good narrative. I suggest to watch out for small grammar errors like punctuation. Try to use some transition words in your essay.
September,15 2009

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Instead of say "a kid learns" in the second paragraph of your essay, you should have put "a child should be learning at his age.
September,30 2009

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Great essay! I admire your concentration, but I have to agree with Mariam and mostly Naseera. The timing is a bit off, but it was a great piece of work. :)
October,03 2009

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Catsteven
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I agree with the posts above, but it doesn't matter for me. I worked myself on the thought and found this piece to be somewhat emotional. It's always a beautiful feeling to read a personal essay.
October,29 2009

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